2010高考英语作文解析

总体上这一片还可以，但不如上次写的，大概17-18分左右，词数最好控制在110-120 左右，建议如下Magic Power of Polite , being polite, especially using polite words in everyday life, has some magic power. 建议:Being polite, especially using polite words in everyday life, indeed has some magic power. 这样可以让indeed 用来起强调作用。 only does it enhance our friendship and better our relationship but it also clears up barriers of communication.建议：我觉得这个better 用得很好，也可以用以前一片阅读理解中的句子 smooth up the bumps in our relationship. 另外我觉得把介词of 改成in 更合适。 me take my own experience as an example.建议：take… for example 是固定词组 day last year, I was hurrying up to go to my classroom when suddenly, a girl of another class run out of the room. 建议：可用the other day 代替 one day; when 后面suddenly 去掉，与when 语义重复。 appeared so suddenly that it seemed impossible for me to stop in time. 本句没有什么问题，但是写作要词组之上，建议用turn up 代替 , as you can imagine, she was knocked over, falling onto the ground. 建议：可加上表示程度的副词 , I said "sorry" to her and showed my guilty sincerely, which made her forgive me and built up friendship between us.建议：immediately 可换成 Upon seeing this ; guilty 换成 apology; Build up 强调过程，建议改为 start is politeness that plays a vital role in our social relationship. 9. So next time you talk with others, just fill your mouths with those magic words, and you'll surely be welcomed everywhere.建议： you 的前面加个 when; let those magic words fly through your mouth更形象。

One possible version I still remember how nervous I was on my first day in the new school three years ago, when I found it difficult to follow my teacher in the first English class. The teacher spoke English throughout the class, which was totally different from the lessons I had taken before. In the morning class the next day, the English teacher came to me while I was reading the text aloud as other students. After listening to me for a while, she gave me a big smile and said she liked my voice very much. The smile shone on the whole day and the following days. A week later, I voulunteered to take charge of English study in my class. Thanks to the comforting smile in my first morning class, I began to be confident.

【参考范文】Dear Sir/Madam,I’m Li Hua. I took the flight BA793 on June 3, 2010. But when I came to my home, I found I lost a suicase. I am writing to you to request you to help me find it suitcase is a small blue one with a zip. There is a lable on the handle with my name and address on it. It si really important for me, because I had put all my important documents in it, including my ID card, passport and so on. Besides, it si what my father sent to me on my for your kind consideration and I look forward to receiving your earliest reply. Yours truly, Li 这个网址上的解析不错

Dear Amy, I�m Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. I�m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! I�m sure you will win. It is reported that the America anti�cancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon. Yours, Li Hua Dear Amy, My name is Li Hua, a student from Xinhua Middle School in China. I have got to know that you got lung cancer and are in great pain. Sorry to hear that. But since you are young, the disease won�t be very serious and you can beat it. It is said that the more letters you receive, the more money the America anti�cancer association will donate. For every letter, they give three cents. So I will try as hard as possible to persuade my friends to write to you so as to help you get enough money to cure the disease. I�m sure you will be OK soon. Yours, Li Hua

湖北的 One possible version I still remember how nervous I was on my first day in the new school three years ago, when I found it difficult to follow my teacher in the first English class. The teacher spoke English throughout the class, which was totally different from the lessons I had taken before. In the morning class the next day, the English teacher came to me while I was reading the text aloud as other students. After listening to me for a while, she gave me a big smile and said she liked my voice very much. The smile shone on the whole day and the following days. A week later, I voulunteered to take charge of English study in my class. Thanks to the comforting smile in my first morning class, I began to be confident.

天津卷Good afternoon. Ladies and gentlemen. Welcome to this year’s English speech competition. Taking part in English speech competition is a helpful way to learn English. While we fully prepare for the competition, we can improve our abilities of listening and speaking and develop a good habit of reading English. In the process of the competition, you should pay special attention to the following rules. First, you should finish your speech in five minutes. Second, you try your best to express yourself in English fluently. Finally, you should have a good English pronunciation. I hope that the English speech competition will be a great success!Thank you! 【思路分析】这是一篇很实用的演讲稿。旨在考查学生在实际生活中在某个具体场合下灵活使用英文来表达自己思想的能力。考查学生学以致用。本演讲稿有三个写作要点：1. 说明比赛的意义，如提高英语听说能力，养成读书的习惯等；2. 说明比赛的注意事项，如每人演讲不超过5分钟，语言流利，发音准确等；3. 预祝比赛圆满成功。然后自由发挥写出适当的结尾。【较高级的结构和短语】form/develop a good habit of doing…; take part in; The first thing we can do is to make…; pay attention to 等。 希望你能满意。

很不错！坚持，但需要多用点高级词汇。

天津卷 Yours Sincerely,Li Hua【参考范文】Dear Sir or Madam,I’m Li Hua from Class One , Senior Two . I’m writing to apply for the opportunity to help the students in Chenxi Hope School with their English . Thus they can improve their English during the summer vacation . Meanwhile , I can learn how to get along with the students and benefit the whole school .I’m kind , easy-going and always ready to help others . I wash clothes and make beds by myself to develop independence . English is my favorite subject and I ‘ve won several prizes in English contests . So I think that I’m qualified for the position .I plan to communicate with the students first to know what they need . Besides , I’ll try to get them more interested in English by telling stories , singing songs , playing games and so on .I’d appreciate it if you could give me the opportunity .Yours sincerely,

一般没答案的，只有满分作文，你可以百度搜索的，我推荐两篇：Dear Amy, I�m Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. I�m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! I�m sure you will win. It is reported that the America anti�cancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon. Yours, Li Hua Dear Amy, My name is Li Hua, a student from Xinhua Middle School in China. I have got to know that you got lung cancer and are in great pain. Sorry to hear that. But since you are young, the disease won�t be very serious and you can beat it. It is said that the more letters you receive, the more money the America anti�cancer association will donate. For every letter, they give three cents. So I will try as hard as possible to persuade my friends to write to you so as to help you get enough money to cure the disease. I�m sure you will be OK soon. Yours, Li Hua

不要紧的，这篇写的不是很好，还要再改进！！！——林老师